by quinn.anya

Question by impossiblegal4ever: My Novel, how do you think it’s coming along?
Hi okay so this is the first page of my novel and i just wanted to get peoples opinions on it, please be honest even if its not the nicest thing i really do need it thank-you

I’m a freak.
My name is Kaylen and quite simply I’m a freak. I wasn’t one, but i guess you aren’t born with autisum either. My little brother is autistic, my dad drinks away his sorrows in booze and me? I can talk to animals, kind of like the girl in that movie Dr. Dolittle, execpt there’s a catch. I can see and talk to dead people, oh and did I mention animals too?
Sound cool? Wrong!
As for my mom she’s AWOL. She took off after she found out her husband was a bumb, her son an ‘abnormal’ and that her daughter was simply crazy (at least she thinks I am.) You could say that I don’t have the best life. I can’t say I don’t like living, I do. I love Austin, my brother. As for my dad, I don’t blame him for drinking, my mom left him with two kids to raise. I can’t say I don’t love him; I do.

Dad makes a good effort and god I know how hard it must be for him to put that smile on his face. He has to deal, for Austin, for me. I’ve always noticed that my dad would give the clothes off his back for either one of us, I love him dearly for that. My mom apparently couldnt see through his drunken hasses.

I never knew her, she took off when i was only five and Austin was only 18 months. I do remember the last thing she said before she left;
“‘I don’t want this, any of it! I can’t believe I let you talk me into marrying you!’”

That, sadly, was the last thing my mom said to my dad before she grabbed her suit case and left.
That was 11 years ago.

**What do you think? Would you ever read it, and where do you think i can improve. My spelling and ggrammer isn’t perfect i didnt want to write it all down***

Best answer:

Answer by Red X
I like it, but god is supposed to be God(capitalized)

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